I would blast a huge fart, then dissapear into bat man style, where i was transported to another world filled with cholcolate indians that shook your hand when you looked them in the eye.

and yes, i know it closed. congrats Park_84!

Thanks a lot! :D

Grats Park_84 and thanks the_bard for the opportunity :)

Yeah, it was pure spontanouity. I was just going to check GOG if anything's new and then work on something. I saw your thread, my mind started working insane and after few hours it was finished. (unfortunatelly I still had to do my work :( )

Congrats to park_84 and thanks for the giveaway, the_bard!

move your hands and body to see everything is working fine. You realise you are not in your own body. You're in someone else's. The darkness annoys you. It drives you crazy. You reach out with your hands and legs and walk very carefully to make sense of your environment. You fall many times and yet you just can't figure out what's around you. There is no switch that you can find and no door whatsoever. Your heart is pounding. Well, you are sure it isn't yours anyway.

You try an make your way back to your bed and see if there is anything or anyone underneath. There doesn't seem to be an opening. You give up finally and scream for help. Your voice is so different to how you <i>feel</i> it should be.

Is this is a dream? Could it be a dream? It feels too real.

Out of nowhere you see something shine. How is that possible? You are sure there is no light seeping in from anywhere for something to shine like that. You go towards the white red spot in your eye remaining from that flash. You reach around with your hands like a desperate man. You clutch something in your hands.

It's sharp. IT CUTS your finger.

It is a knife. A sharp knife. A knife that reflected something back in the darkest of rooms.

You gently position it near your stomach. And then you get ready to do it.

You....


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Thanks for the giveaway mate. Fantastic idea! Really goes with the theme of the game,

I saved the page to read it quietly at home (when online I often suffer TL;DR syndrome). It's a very good story, with an interesting plot twist at the end. Maybe a bit rough in the edges (32 playmates killed with toothpicks launched as shurikens? A double dildo forced through the guy head? Really?)

Very interesting stuff to read, anyway. ;)

Do you got inspiration from a specific game when you were creating it? As Amnesia or Penumbra?

Hmm? I would expect from gamers to have open minds. OK, maybe you haven't played or don't like adventures? All the inventory weapons surely got you the clue that I was doing it as an adventure type of story, with all the weird "weapons" picked up.

Otherwise, thank you.
No, I had no inspiration whatsoever. I was making things on the go.

I hope there weren't too many typos. I did not read it after finishing it, because I just wanted to finish as soon as possible, because I was surely not planning writing for a few hours but doing some work :D

Not the case. I'm a sucker for adventures since the first "Maniac Mansion".

It's just that (IMHO) I think the story would have benefited from a more focused approach: one more terrifying (Friday the 13th kinda, with more realistic deaths: toothpicks used in the eyes of playmates, the double dildo inserted into Heffner's throat, causing their suffocation) or consistently humorous (i.e. changing the part of the capture & the commentator speech to something less darker, more light-headed, in line with the rest of the story).

Don't get me wrong. I enjoyed the story, including the hilarious reactions of the protagonist in each encounter with evil. :D

Just curious. :)

Minor typos, none of importance. Although I'm hardly the most appropriate to say. ;)

And THANKS for your story, in case it wasn't clear in my previous answer. I hope to have the opportunity to read more stories from you in the future.

I'm sure it would have been more polished if I wasn't under pressure to continue my work.

For future reading, I guess there will have to be another write something giveaway ;)

But, I'll provide you with links to a racing tournament I organise where I write post-race reports. You might find the reports interesting ;).

Since you don't like my use of weapons :D I am curious what would have you done with candle holder, a key chain with a black bunny head with bowtie, a pair of stilettoes, two different hairpins, a very old and very hard loaf of bread, handcuffs, a wooden broom, set of tooth-picks, a bottle of water based lubricant and a two-sided dildo.

Ah, you play with advantage there. As the author of the story you choose your own weapons and situations. :)

But I had chosen more realistic deaths (basically, because using some of your weapons in that illogical although humorous way [*] broke my immersion).

I have already commented on the toothpicks and dildo. The use of the wooden broom, candle holder, the handcuffs and the key chain (as bait) are OK for me.

But i.e.,the pair of stilettoes might be used to penetrate the trachea or perforate the jugular artery, the hairpins in ears or eyes, the hard loaf breaking the skull (but not pulling away the head), the lubricant in one of the upper echelons of the ladder, so that the enemies slipping and breaking the neck, etc. Same weapons, more realistic use. ;)

Intensifying the realism of the situation so that the final twist hit harder...

But that's just my opinion, and does not mean having or claiming to be right.

[*] Yes, I know that adventure games are often resolved just so illogical. Consider it a habit of mine, tired of seeing books and movies spoils the argument with inconsistent details that could have been easily resolved in other way.