Posted November 27, 2012
It did sound distinctly non-lawyerish in some places (which is a good thing for what you are aiming at).
It certainly sounds better than anything I have ever written, (well maybe expect my God of War/Breaking Bad slash fanfiction). But I really don't want to be the poor schmock who has to interpret it. My stuff is always very matter of fact. I distinctly remember writing the articles of association for some small "after school helping poor students cafe/workshop" as a favour for a friend. I was somewhat bummed that they took the three pages standard draft they found on the internet instead of my 13 page draft. Maybe it was better to understand and less intimidating, but if they ever needed to liquidate real property or turn it into a publicly traded company, they wish they would have taken my draft. (I was fresh out of university and liked to show off.)
Btw, how about updating the ToS. ;-P
" Use of the Service requires a Windows XP, Windows Vista, Windows 7 or Mac OS X compatible computer that meets or exceeds the minimum hardware specifications "
It certainly sounds better than anything I have ever written, (well maybe expect my God of War/Breaking Bad slash fanfiction). But I really don't want to be the poor schmock who has to interpret it. My stuff is always very matter of fact. I distinctly remember writing the articles of association for some small "after school helping poor students cafe/workshop" as a favour for a friend. I was somewhat bummed that they took the three pages standard draft they found on the internet instead of my 13 page draft. Maybe it was better to understand and less intimidating, but if they ever needed to liquidate real property or turn it into a publicly traded company, they wish they would have taken my draft. (I was fresh out of university and liked to show off.)
Btw, how about updating the ToS. ;-P
" Use of the Service requires a Windows XP, Windows Vista, Windows 7 or Mac OS X compatible computer that meets or exceeds the minimum hardware specifications "